"I do not choose the right word. I get rid of the wrong one." A. E. Houseman, Edwardian poet, author of A Shropshire Lad
What line editors (sometimes called substantive editors) do:
A line editor works with your manuscript after the developmental editing is complete, when you (with the help of your developmental editor) have revised, shaped, and organized your manuscript to your satisfaction. In line editing, I will carefully examine every word and sentence of your manuscript, looking for and correcting any problems in clarity, meaning, word choice, syntax, voice, and tone. Revising for smooth rhythm and seamless transitions is a crucial element of this work. Issues in a manuscript might involve the writer’s use of point of view (e.g., “head-hopping”), verb tense problems, overused words and clichés, and awkward phrases or sentences. Trust my fresh eyes and deep knowledge of writing style to address all these issues and more.